Second round is on!

January 22, 2007 | Karin's Blog | 95 comments

Okay, ladies, while my agent judge struck swift and sure that doesn’t mean she had an easy time of it. Thank you, agent judge! Now here are the 65 first lines that make it to the second round. You have until midnight this Friday to post your original first line (no changes) and the next line. Same rules apply. One sentence for your second line, and all entries must be posted in the comment section of this post. Good luck, and make those second lines count!

1. “Your sorry ass is going to be even sorrier, Jimmy Ray!”
2. Keaton, Lady Denham, cursed her bosom as she balanced on the ledge over her father’s study.
3. Just when Christine Abernathy thought life couldn’t get any worse her umbrella collapsed, drenching her with icy Oklahoma rain.
4. Elizabeth squeezed her eyes tight and turned her face away from the wicked-looking blade.
5. Jack Sutton heard a whisper of movement a split second before an arm wrapped around his neck and something sharp plunged into his gut.
6. “What does he think I am – a moron?”
7. So what if he’d gained a reputation for being wicked.
8. As much as he’d hoped Lacey McLaren had gained a hundred pounds and sprouted horns in the five years since he’d last seen her, she hadn’t.
9. Like a snake, coiled and ready to strike, it’d been waiting for him when he’d arrived at work.
10. Kenzie Summers swiveled on the bar stool, her gaze encompassing every inch of the lively room in an attempt to find someone to ruin her reputation.
11. Who said dying was easy?
12. Through the darkness the child ran, dogging the woman’s heels.
13. Kyra Delano sipped from her glass of whiskey straight, savoring the sharp burn on her tongue and chill of ice melting in its wake.
14. “Damn, it’s hotter than the devil’s backyard out here.”
15. I was in sophomore English–midweek, early November, daydreaming about life after high school–when Sam Blaine made his first move and Jane Austen made her first comment.
16. The man lay face-up in a pool of his own blood.
17. To say I was running away would be to admit I couldn’t face the horror that had been inflicted upon me four months earlier.
18. Sure Mary Poppins seemed delightful and charming when she was shaping the futures of Jane and Michael Banks, but now that she’s adopted me as a pet project, not so much.
19. No doubt about it–Cosmo Fortune was a royal pain in the ass.
20. “Some wild animal is going to eat you alive!”
21. She’d become nothing more than a common thief.
22. Death comes to all of us in many ways.
23. “Jesus Mari, when’s the last time you were laid?”
24. “I can make a woman come using just my mouth.”
25. Lord, that man was gorgeous.
26. “Just keep on driving, Mister,” Moxie said as she struggled to keep the gun in her hand from shaking as she aimed it at the man’s head.
27. Jordan Blake always figured he’d go to hell someday, but he never expected it to be this soon.
28. In the grand scheme of life, was slipping Viagra into your husband’s dinner really a bad thing?
29. “Petersen, what in the name of God are you doing?”
30. The town was quaint, post card perfect; no one would ever guess it held so much malice.
31. The gossip about Cassie Russell swirled around town like a nasty dust.
32. Maybe she should just kill Jackson.
33. He’d introduced her to passion in payment for his life.
34. “Despite what you apparently believe,” Lieutenant Kathryn Glace snapped, the pale skin across her cheeks tightening and tinting peach, “I’ve given this a great deal of thought—the family is legitimate, and their unique. . .talents. . have proven significantly helpful in the past.”
35. Joshua shuddered as the massive red door creaked open, allowing the stench of brimstone to steal into the room.
36. On Valentine’s Day, a Friday, Emma O’Manny woke up with two kids, a minivan, a house in the Portland suburbs, and a husband with a sick sense of humor.
37. The campfire smoke curled around him, mingling with scents of dust and fry bread.
38. Across the crowded ferry, the little girl looked up and Gabe Moreau ducked his head, praying she’d sit tight and stay the hell away.
39. “Are you out of your mind–you can’t kidnap a cover model!”
40. Lindy perused Steven’s form for the one hundredth time since lunch, wondering if today would be the day she would seduce him.
41. Fighting the natural urge to fade away, disappear, and remain in reclusion, Lelandi Wildhaven spied the seedy tavern down the street where she would set up her first night of surveillance.
42. Couldn’t she just go back to sleep and forget she’d ever poisoned him?
43. “I’m sorry to call, but this is bad,” her father said, his voice melodramatic, like over-rehearsed lines from a low-budget horror flick.
44. I couldn’t sell my jewelry because it would be traceable so I simply took the wedding and engagement rings and dropped them down a sewer – a fitting gesture, and quicker than divorce.
45. For as long as I can remember, I’ve wanted to be the female version of either Sherlock Holmes or Wong Fei Hung, and that pretty much sums up my life.
46. Wealth no longer amused Hugh Hennigan and tonight it suffocated him.
47. Mike Gallagher dropped dead–again.
48. When I walked into the office, it felt like the place was holding its breath.
49. Adam McKinnon stretched out on a tree branch and studied the full moon, his cool blue eyes contemplative.
50. Jordan James paced the tight confines of the elevator, her pounding feet echoed loudly in the tight space.
51. “Son, you’ve got more metal in you than the Terminator.”
52. “Not no, but hell no,” Maggie said as they stood behind the stage in the massive ballroom of the Marriott Hotel in downtown Dallas.
53. “Maybe I should become a lesbian for a week,” I blurted.
54. “On the sole count of first degree murder, how does the jury find?”
55. “All men are lying, cheating sex-fiends,” said an irate caller on the radio talk show.
56. “Maybe you should consider getting a boob job.”
57. “Gone? What the hell do you mean, gone?”
58. A more asinine circumstance than he now faced was hard to imagine.
59. “Damn loser recruit,” Captain Connors muttered as he sweltered in the alleyway, forced to endure the scents of week-old Chow Mein coming from the Dumpster he leaned against.
60. A dead man asked me to trust you?
61. “”What’s Santa doing with a shotgun, partner?” Detective Christina James asked her partner as she strapped on her Kevlar vest.
62. I must’ve pissed off someone at Psych-Ops to pull down an assignment in Forgotten Detroit.
63. Trevor Carlton hated threats–when they were directed at him.
64. Katy made her way to the phone, stumbling past the latest tawdry romantic novel, the hero’s shimmering pectors facing up, thus drawing her glance once gain as she drip, drip, dripped to the counter where her cell lay, sure that her falling on her new Ginsu knives, a make-up gift from her circus performing boyfriend, Mr. Shriek, was sure to put a damper on the evening ahead.
65. Okay, let me say from the get-go, I do not have a problem with cops but right now, though, a cop has a real problem with me.

Great job ladies!!

K*

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95 Comments

  1. Christine

    Lindy perused Steven’s form for the one hundredth time since lunch, wondering if today would be the day she would seduce him. Over two months of dating and the hottest it had gotten was a little open mouth kissing.

  2. Amy Atwell

    No doubt about it–Cosmo Fortune was a royal pain in the ass. Oh, he tried to make you think his brain-power had receded like his hairline, mumbled his way out of messes with his folksy charm, and all the while he juggled his numerous murky dealings with the same precise arcs as those flaming torches he now wielded onstage.

  3. Cheryel Hutton

    “Some wild animal is going to eat you alive!”

    The voice coming through the cell phone had Kia rolling her eyes, as she turned her car off the main road and through the narrow band of dark woods leading to her new home.

  4. Sheila Raye

    He’d introduced her to passion in payment for his life. And yet, the woman who would be Captain André Marin’s salvation had closed her mind against him, locking him out of her dreams.

    Thanks for running this contest!

  5. Tracey

    Oh this is soooo good – more lines please.

  6. D'Ann Linscott-Dunham

    #14
    “Damn, it’s hotter than the devil’s backyard out here.” Castana Castillo took her hands from the steering wheel just long enough to swipe at the river of sweat running down the nape of her neck and to adjust the volume on George Strait’s “Amarillo by Morning”.
    **************************************************
    What fun, Karin!
    Thanks!

  7. LaDonna

    Who said dying was easy?

    Ruby May stepped out the front door of the Delta Funeral Home in what had been her good luck dress–until they buried her in it.

    *****Thanks for such a great contest, Karin! I wish all of you good luck!

  8. Lorie Hartt

    “Jesus Mari, when’s the last time you were laid?” The question, coming from this particular girlfriend, wasn’t really surprising; that she’d blurt it out in the middle of a crowded nightclub… well, it made me squirm.

  9. Lorie Hartt

    **I hit post before I could add my thanks to Karin and wish everyone good luck**

  10. Mel

    is it just my screen, or is everyone seeing only half of the first liners? (sob)

  11. Tina Conine

    Trevor Carlton hated threats-when they were directed at him. He snapped the cell phone shut on his controlling wife’s warning not to drink excessively during her father’s wake; he planned to celebrate the old man’s death, just as he planned to celebrate hers.

    ___________
    This is a great contest! It makes you evaluate every single line. I am so impressed with everyone’s work.

  12. Karin

    It must be your screen, Mel. I can see all of the lines just fine.

  13. Loretta Wheeler

    We’ve just tried going to view, and changed the text size to the smallest setting and it now reads correctly, it was set at medium before. If the other suggestions don’t work, then try that?:)

  14. Loretta Wheeler

    Karin, I’m not sure what Mel said ….but it looks like she’s having trouble viewing all the screen? I’m having the same problem, the left side where the name is and downward is completely black like the borders. The page appears off center.

    I know you “luv” hearing that! Sorry:(

  15. Kerry Blaisdell

    It’s displaying fine for me (Win XP, using IE 7.x). Maybe it’s a browser issue, or you need to delete cookies and refresh….

  16. Anne-Marie

    Maybe try a Ctrl + refresh at the same time. A lot of times it clears up a lot of browser viewing issues. Hope it works. If not, hope you figure it out soon.

  17. Karin

    Sorry some of you are having tech difficulties with the site. Try launching through the blue e.

  18. Mary Marvella

    “Maybe I should become a lesbian for a week,” I blurted.
    Carol choked on what was left of her watered- down frozen strawberry daiquiri.

  19. raine

    “Petersen, what in the name of God are you doing?”

    He’d heard the angelic voice of the woman speak to him many times before.

  20. Debbie Dunn

    For the last two days the comment section of this part of your blog is displaying incorrectly on my computer. I can only read the right half of the entries. All comments under your other entries display just fine. Is it my computer (say it ain’t so) or are others having this problem?
    I’m having so much fun reading the entries…so not being able to read the more recent posts is a bummer.

  21. Debbie Dunn

    Karin,
    Could you repeat the launch thing again. All I got was something about the blue e.
    Thanks for your incredible patience!

  22. Sharon Cullen

    Like a snake, coiled and ready to strike, it’d been waiting for him when he’d arrived at work. And as it had when he’d first read it, his stomach knotted and cold fear wrapped around him.

    ——
    Karin – I had a ball during the first contest and am having fun with this one too. Even if I don’t have anymore fingernails to bite.

  23. Cynthia D'Alba

    Should she just kill him?
    She wanted to, and lord knew he deserved it.

  24. Debbie Dunn

    Thank goodness for teenagers. Tried all suggestions above, but could only see half the display. Smart daughter ‘o mine suggested “highlighting” and voila, can now enjoy everyone’s entries.
    Thanks again, Karin for running this wonderful contest!

  25. Judy Soifer

    So what if he’d gained a reputation for being wicked. Dair Curator simply did what his race had done for thousands of years–watch over mortals.
    ************************************
    Thank you for this terrific opportunity, Karin. It’s so much fun reading everybody’s lines.

  26. Sandra Barkevich

    Oh, Judy! I love your 1st & 2nd lines!

    There are so many stories here that I want to read the full already. LOL

    Sandy 🙂
    http://www.sandra.barkevich.com
    *new to Sandra’s Goings On – January’s guest blogger is Jackie Kessler – Hell’s Belles

  27. Meretta ~ American Title Finalist

    Across the crowded ferry, the little girl looked up and Gabe Moreau ducked his head, praying she’d sit tight and stay the hell away. Blunt fingernails trenched into sweat slicked palms and a phantom tingle in his right palm itched to feel the reassuring weight of his standard issue Glock.

    ___

    Thanks, Karin!

  28. Judy Soifer

    Thank you, Sandy. I know I’m one of the last to post, but I wanted to wait unit today. It’s my dh’s birthday and I thought it would be lucky. 🙂

  29. Judy Soifer

    Woops! That’s until today, not unit. LOL!

  30. Loretta Wheeler

    Debbie,
    I tried the highlighting thing too, but it doesn’t “feel” the same. Try going to view while you’re on this page only, hit the smallest selection for type…that’ll put it all on the page and it’s still very readable – readable, hmmm looks odd, oh well, you can SEE the thing!;)
    On another note, “I” still have my fingernails, but my valium stash is gettin’ low……

  31. Debbie Dunn

    Thanks, Loretta. Finally saw that in someone’s suggestions and gave it a try and it did work. Hopefully, this is the only page where it is not working. Feeling for you on the loss of fingernails….

  32. Anne Clarke

    As much as he’d hoped Lacey McLaren had gained a hundred pounds and sprouted horns in the five years since he’d last seen her, she hadn’t. Noah cursed, unable to pull his gaze away; if anything, she was more beautiful now than when they’d first met.

  33. Gaill

    Okay, let me say from the get-go, I do not have a problem with cops but right now, though, a cop has a real problem with me. What might give that away is that I’m standing on the side of the road in handcuffs with cold eggs in my pockets, making the fact that I really have to pee more pressing with every passing minute.

  34. Gaill

    Sorry it took me so long to post, it’s been a heck of a week, but today is my Friday, so I’m facing my weekend with the plan to write, then write, then, maybe do some laundry, then I might write. Oh yeah, I’m also thinking I’ll probably take a nap. Or two. And I’m gonna watch AI. Thanks, Karin, for this great contest!

  35. Maryann

    “What does he think I am – a moron?”
    Audra yanked the receiver away from her ear as the man’s voice hit another crescendo; he ranted on, not waiting for her reply.

  36. Cheryl A Wilson-Bonner

    #60

    A dead man asked me to trust you?

    “Give me one good reason why I should,” Kiera Richards demanded.

    _____________

    Karin, Thanks for running this contest. I took a chance and I made it through the first round. This is fun and exciting.

  37. Stephanie Lilley

    Mike Gallagher dropped dead””again.

    And the Dead Mike Vixens shrieked, “Go, Mike! Go, Mike! DMVs rule!”

  38. Karin

    Hey, ladies, sorry I was MIA there for a bit, glad all of the glitches are ironed out for those who had trouble viewing.

  39. Lorie Hartt

    It’s so hard not to comment on some of the lines. I’m quite intrigued by many of them.

  40. Paula

    # 61
    “What’s Santa doing with a shotgun, partner?” Detective Christina James asked her partner as she strapped on her Kevlar vest.
    “He got fired. Merry Christmas.”

  41. Alyssa Goodnight

    Sure Mary Poppins seemed delightful and charming when she was shaping the futures of Jane and Michael Banks, but now that she’s adopted me as a pet project, not so much.

    Okay, so chances are it’s not really her–my journal just happens to be channeling someone with exactly the same MO.

  42. Gracie Stanners

    I couldn’t sell my jewellery because it would be traceable so I simply took the wedding and engagement rings and dropped them down a sewer – a fitting gesture, and quicker than divorce. As I’d never really trusted plastic my cash reserve was better than average.

  43. Karin

    Gracie, I’m sorry, but all entries had to be posted by midnight Friday night. The deadline was clearly stated.

    The entries have already gone to the judge.

  44. Gracie Stanners

    Sorry Karin! I’m outside the time limit so guess I’m not eligible for the second line. Thanks anyway. Some great beginning here, folks!
    🙂

  45. Karin

    Gracie, I’m sorry too. Several entrants waited too long. 🙁

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